Crimson Tears
by
Leigh G.
copyright 04-08-2007 Contest Winner
Age Rating: 10 to 127
So many marching to their deaths day by day
Simply following the commands of a madman seeking revenge
Can't you just see?
That war will take us no where?
There's no "winning" at this point
There never was, so why do you insist there will be?
Our allies are our enemies now,
Can't you just see where we're going to be?
This planet isn't going to last forever, so why can't you focus on making it last longer?
Rather than killing those who live on it?
So many marching to their deaths day by day
How many crimson tears of blood have been cried?
How many have lost their loved ones in vain?
So why do you continue to make them march,
Only for your own selfish reasons?
Is revenge all that you're living for?
Will there ever be a point you'll stop craving more crimson tears?
So many marching to their deaths day by day
You're killing this country,
And speeding the decay of the world
You're only bringing us down
How many more people will have to cry tears of blood,
For your revenge?
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Beautiful. I wish I could get the chance to read such well written politcal works like this. So far this is the first political poem I've read, but it fits so very well in what is happening at this very moment. A very deep work that makes people think what is really going on in this world. Very nice work. Keep it up.
~Brittney~
You ask a lot of good questions and ones that those in charge should be forced to answer.
I found a few clerical errors which you may want to correct.
1/ "Rather than killing those that (I believe this should be 'who') live on it?"
2/ "Will there ever be a point (add'at which') you don't crave more crimson tears?"
3/ "Your (should be 'you're')killing this country,"
4/ "You're only bring (should be 'bringing') us down"
I've never read a better poem than this that addressed this isseu of politics. Politicians are the bane of this world! I bet anything that if we shipped all of them off to Mars, in 30 or so years, Mars would be in even worse shape than Earth. O.O
I've always felt particularly strong about this subject, and I feel that power, politically speaking, is a notion that idiotic world leaders are trying to turn into a tangible thing. They sit around, drinking champagne and plotting murders, while their victims are being killed off by the thousands. Did I ever mention how much I hate those kind of people?
This latest poem is very powerful! The phrases you used here carried so much truth in them that I'm pretty sure if Bush read this, he'd resign from office. XD This would make them all guilty, it would! T'is such a pity that the only people who know anything are the ones who suffer, and that those who lead us don't even know what suffering means.
There were some grammar mistakes here, though! Look it over; I'm sure you'll find the flaws. Hint: one of them's a "your" that should be a "you're". :)
Fantastic write, my friend! Once again, you bowl the world over with your work!
I love it! I love the way you took the topic of goverment. Alma just so you know poems do that lots of the times, it is another poem format. I think you could make the ryhmes (as stated in contest) more noticable. Keep up the good work! Thanks for joining WEC! I want to know weather HTML works on comments?
Whoa, this was really deep. Sounds like the war we are having now with Bush as the head of commands. I'm not a big fan of Bush. Can't wait until '08. How come you capitalize all of the beginnings of your lines? It's up to you. This was a really great poem that has hate, pain, and sadness written all over it. Hope to read more. Talk to you later.
~Alma H.
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