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Creativity comes in batches, your work has a style and flow that sparks interest, a jumbled feel that makes the reader pause and taste the flavor you are trying to accomplish, I am impressed. Walt
Very nice. Although I think the way you spaced it made it read a bit...awkwardly, and I think you could have used a bit more punctuation. Maybe if you change it around a little it would be much better, but it is just fine the way it is too. If this was seemed to have more flow to it for you, then by all means don't do what I say just to make me feel better, but other then that a very good write. Nice job.
Nice poem, Euna! Your choice of spacing made it read a little weird, but that's a minor flow. I like the topic and it's refreshing to see proper capitalization! Dammit, William beat me to the first comment! And the "first comment dance" is mine! :p :D You did tell a short story in this piece, but I like longer lines. Your last poem possessed the flow I'm partial to. Great work, Euna! It's good to see you're submitting even though finals are in the air...I'm sure every PnP member during the educational system will be cheering come the end of the year... I myself, love homeschool finals because I'm not learning anything new! :D I'm tested on the same information three times a book before the final test that's my over-all grade for that book in all the subjects, so for me finals are a please... I started school at six AM, and it's 10 AM and I'm done! Huzzah! Eh, sorry I'm getting random!
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Leigh of the Commenting Community
(random thoughts) I wish your name was in the Spell-Checker...
Sometimes when I'm reading works by an author with whom I'm not familiar, I try not to over-analyze too much. Not at all, really, but we all know how that goes--it doesn't. Your poem: Technical errors-- none that I could find. Punctuation, right up there. Spelling, nothing to point to. Flow, smooth. Progression, smooth. Enough with the technical. I sense a desire to bring about the balance necessary in all things. Life/death, fear/hope, sadness/joy, all the things (or most of them, anyway) captured in a very short space but skillfully done. Good imagery and texture. I liked this piece. Vaguely troubling, but that's me not your write. As is said "first hit, first comment dance."
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