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 11-12-2007 Debra Rose
sometimes what we need and what we want are far different, and what we get is far better than what we hoped for. This is an amazing piece that shows just how valuable it is to make the most of what you have. Wonderful!
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06-13-2007 Walter Jones
The palette bleeds colors in image and truth no gray only a rainbow waiting to be held, right or wrong, clever and intuitive, enjoyed the play on words and message, nicely done.. Walt
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05-19-2007 Mehrina B.
I agree with Sam P; I sang this poem to myself rather than read it. I didn't make much sense of it until I read the last stanza. It seemed to me that you were thinking of what to paint, wanting to make something really beautiful, and you unconsciously painted a snowing mountain, which may not be necessarily beautiful, but definitely has an almost discernible air of grandeur.
I admire the emotion you painted on this poem. I thought of your words as subtle, which is a great way to write. I defintely enjoyed reading this! And the last line was, in my opinion, the absolute best! "I find myself with a masterpiece of a snowing mountain". :D I used to paint when I was little. I remember this one painting I made of a dawn over a field. If I were to fit any of my paintings with this poem, it would've been that one.
Great job, Jane! A thoughtful poem, perfect in every way!
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05-19-2007 Richard Reed Jr
This was a wonderful piece, to me stating that you don't necessarily need fancy things or choose the greatest road. Just follow your dream. who knows what wonderful places it will take you.
Thank you for this write.
Your PnP friend,
Rich
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05-16-2007 Samantha P.
I love this, it made me sing the poem instead of read it. I love how you used your imagination and describe something so different. It made me laugh to know how often we never end up with what we wanted but something completely different
However in life it is nice to know we can always go on one main road but there are many different paths, and if we dont pay attention, or dont want to pay attention we may end up somewhere we never knew.
I then wonder why you chose the colors black and white, maybe because often inside they are empty and possibly not shades at all, or maybe black and white is the balance of good and evil which brings me to the question did u perposaly mean to use symbolism in this poem? because u did, and i think it is maginificent
This poem was a bit short, but still we dont always need a lot of words to describe our emotions or to get our point across.
Antha of the cc
LOVE IT!!
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05-13-2007 Wayne Thomas
Pessimist, me! I was all ready for another sappy, amateurish effort. I seldom comment on those, by the way. I read through, the nicely done free verse, and the ending with the snow-lashed mountain just blew me away. How wrong of any of us to prejudge another's work! Terrific job!
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05-11-2007 Sam Hackel-Butt
Don't forget that if you're only given two colors (or in this case, two shades,) mixing them gives you a whole new range! Dream in monochromatic schemes but remember everything has color and beauty- it's just subjective. Don't go back to a different dream. Stick with this one :)
-Sam of the CC
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05-11-2007 Euna P.
O__O Wow, I really love it!
It's such a good poem! Vived imagery with a nice twist at the end, it's an excellent work! Dreams are weird things...
I really liked the image of the snowing mountain at the end, a different sort of beauty than that of a rainbow, but beautiful in a more majestic way, if you know what I mean. Emotion is very clearly displayed, and I love what you did with it. I cannot say enough how much I loved this poem. GREAT JOB!!!
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05-11-2007 Leigh G.
Haha! I enjoyed this piece! I'm glad I checked your page. :) I enjoyed this piece, it reminded me vaguely of Utada Hikaru's song, "Colors". I like the bit with the dream, giving the poem a layer of depth that the reader doesn't anticipate at first. I didn't find any grammar or spelling errors either. :) I used to do a lot of painting back in 2004...I haven't done as it much in the last year, since I've been writing so much. Anyway! I liked this piece, and I'm glad I spotted it! Ahhh, summer is so close! Summer is an author's best friend, no? Well, that and a spell check! (or at least it is for me!)
Your friend,
Leigh of the Commenting Community
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05-09-2007 Frank Fields
Again, "first hit, first comment dance* LOL I like this little piece. It's short, but no one ever said poems have to be lengthy, drawn out affairs. It starts well, is connected up with nice imagery and thoughts, and ends very nicely. ^^
I can't even pick at your spelling or punctuation. This "critic's salty pen" is being put out of a job by works like yours. But wait, no one ever said a critic could say only bad things about a piece. I like going from a dismal black and white, through picking another dream, and ending up with a snowing mountain. Well done!!
William :)
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