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I Love You Guys
by
Samantha P.
(Age: 15)
copyright 05-23-2007
Age Rating: 13 to 127
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*To everyone, this poem is dedicated to Emily Keyes and all the lives lost at Virginia Tech.
This poem may not make sense to you, but I have tried to edit it in the best way that I can so it makes sense. If you do not understand the cement block, that means they made it into a wall. And if you have any questions about this poem please ask me. Also you may run across a few mistakes, or that it doesn't flow properly but that's how I want it. Imperfect and rough to show people that life doesn't flow*
I strut these halls peppy and rambunctious,
Shoelaces drag along the thrifty carpet.
Usually I snort with laughter with my forever friends...
Today is different, It's another day where our school forbids us from watching the school news.
And now Emily, you pass a haunting memory.
No one can forget anything, and they all think of you,
along with the fresh blood of the Thirty-two.
Luminescent tears are fresh, as the flags remain half staffed.
Your day is remembered along with the other thirty-two
We do not mourn the loss of the second death, the one who shot you,
Or the thirty-third who also deserved to pay his due.
What I would give to turn Back the hand of time.
For that selfish barbarian to take my life and for you to not die.
I strut these halls peppy and rambunctious,
My shoelaces drag across the thrifty carpet.
I snort with laughter with my forever friends.
I pass by the room, in our school, where your last moments where spent.
The only way in, is a wooden door and it remains permanently locked.
The other way in was where a bomb went off.
But they've also closed that door
And now it is a cement block
Your memory lives on, all of your memories,
I don't go a day without thinking of you.
You are forever all in my heart.
I love you guys
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01-06-2008 Lauren T.
When this happened, I was too young to understand, now its hitting me like someone had punched me in the gut. The lives lost, and the innocent people who were hurt makes me want to cry.
Your poem is great.
-Laur
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12-19-2007 Rikki V.
I just thought of something i'd like to add to my comment from a couple days ago. Now that you have edited tyhis, these people need to come have a second look, because it truly is amazing. also, it was about something so emotional and heart rending that even your mistakes from before could almost be excused.
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12-16-2007 Rikki V.
i remember when this happened of course i wasnt in high school at the time.
sam this was a really good poem and you are a really good writer. and no matter what i am always here i will always be greatful to how you helped me and i will do the same
Ikkir
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09-20-2007 Wayne Thomas
Antha--
Sensible. Rough. Chilling. One of the best--heck, the best--I've read on p-n-p for a long while. I must admit I wasn't fully attuned to this tragedy until I read your excellent poem. I like the imagery of "fresh blood" and "luminescent tears". It adds a very human touch to your work. I had no trouble with the cement block as a symbol. It added to the piece, I think. Thanks,
Wayne
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07-16-2007 Emily Garwood
this poem was wonderful to me it made sense i understand what happened i didn't here about it though i guess im too far away over here. But in my opinion a poem doesn't always have to make perfect sense because you just want to write what you feel just like you said before the poem the fact its a little rough round the edges shows that life is smooth. anyways very good write and a tribute to remember
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06-20-2007 Leigh G.
Sorry for not commenting sooner! I read this when I signed out of PnP after it was on the main page, and gained access to comment on it on the 17th, but I've been busy. >.<
This poem really shows how you've developed as an author since your first poem here on PnP. :) The imperfect flow didn't bother me at all, because most poems written from the heart are better left filled with raw emotion. I submitted a poem, "Who Do You Hate" and I'm going to delete it because it only got three points of praise first shot. >.< It could never recover from that; and I was really proud of the poem. I don't know if I'll re-submit. Anyway, I found one error in the first line of the forth paragraph, you have "back" capitalized for no apparent reason.
Great work, keep writing!
Leigh of the Commenting Community
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06-04-2007 Denise Fairgrieve
I loved the fact that you explained things before the read.
This piece is lovely in the fact that it shows off your emotion for the people that fell that day. I commend you on writing this piece for that fact, and that it still seems to be very fresh in your mind.
I hope one day you can find more ways to cope with her loss, as she seems to be very dear to you. I wish you well.
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05-27-2007 Lyle Berry
I loved the honesty and the sincerity of this poem - clearly it broached a tragic and emotion charged subject and one about which many words will be penned. The success here, in your work was the originality and heart felt portrayal that you presented. It is clear how you were moved and you convey the impact of this horror to your readers. Well done. Best Regards, Lyle
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