It's Better This Way
by
Leigh G.
copyright 05-22-2007
Age Rating: 10 to 127
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Just so you know, this is a song! I had a tough time getting it all to flow, and it'll make the most sense to the two people it's for, Mehrina B and Jordan Screws, with a few abstract additions. Enjoy!
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It’s better this way
It’s time we faced the facts
And take punishment for our acts
It’s better this way
Sure, it’s been fun
True, we’re not done
It’s better this way
Because if we continue this charade,
To waste, our futures will be laid
It’s better this way
So then maybe we’ll treasure
The time we spend together
Like we did before, wasn’t it grand?
I noticed not too long ago,
How casually we were treating friendship
Unlike how we treated it before, as a great gift
Maybe it’s true that distance is something good
It’s better this way
For us not to touch
It’s better this way
If we don’t talk so much
It’s better this way
For us to stay away
It’s better this way
I’m no longer afraid to say…
It’s better this way
It’s gotten more complex recently,
And it was living hell about a year ago
But I’m stronger now,
I’ve got more control over myself
I’m not afraid anymore,
I can say it without any doubt in my heart,
It’s better this way
For us not to touch
It’s better this way
If we don’t talk so much
It’s better this way
Do believe me?
I don’t plan on letting myself slip away again,
No matter how hard the decisions I make in the near future are,
Even if I’m hurt in ways I can’t believe by my loved ones,
I truly believe although it’s not better for the three of us,
It’s better for those around us
Maybe we’ll all be able to think clearer,
Without the charade
Distance really can be something good,
As long as we’re close sometimes…
It really is better this way
So maybe we’ll treasure,
Our time together
It’s better this way,
Please believe me
The resolve is in you somewhere
You’re stronger than you think
I’ll never hold it against you if you cried, for any reason why
I address you both now,
I didn’t want to believe in myself for a while
Because if I did, I’d have to be truthful with myself too
For it was so much easier to lie
If it means you’ll be happy when we finally do get time together,
Just the three of us goofing off,
Can you see why I’ve come to terms that while we’re being pulled in so many directions,
That it really is good for us, deep down?
It’s better this way
For us not touch
It’s better this way
For us not to talk to much
It’s better this way
For us to stay away
It’s better this way
I’m no longer afraid to say,
It’s better this way
But, are you still afraid to admit, that it’s better this way?
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Wow Leigh, this is great! it has a good flow. You seem to phrase all of the emotion perfectly. I've been in this position where it comes down to turning a friendship into something more. You described it just right. i like this a lot.
Wow. This is a wonderful song on friendships and how the way they are may be better then trying to change it. I love it. I personally didn't find any misspellings or any grammatical errors, and I think the flow in very nice. This is very good work. I only wish I could have imagined the same song playing as you did while you wrote these lyrics. ^_^ Keep up the good work.
~Brittney~
First, I'll mention the one spelling error, which was in the last chorus: "It’s better this way For us not to talk to much." The second 'to' is used meaning excessively, which should be spelled 'too.'
As for the song itself, I loved it. I only wish I could hear it sung to music. Friendship is such an important part of life, not to be taken lightly. And sometimes it needs to be preserved just as it is, in order not to ruin it.
The internet is such a powerful presence in our world, and it still amazes me, the friendships that can be formed across so many miles. It's wonderful.
Indeed, a very grand structure. It is a song, you say? Ahh, I wish to hear the melody. "Distance really can be something good" How true that sentence is... Yes, of course, sometimes if one truly cares for another, the person has to let them go, even if it means sacrifice and pain. Very strong emotions are inscribed into the lyrics, yet the sentences are lightly constructed. The rhythm and the rhymes of this poem is superb; many songs are poems, correct? Also, I love the way how this piece flows gently, yet conveys out the many bittersweet sentiments of friendship and love.
"First hit!" Can't help it, I'm here, no one else is. :p "First comment?" Well, I don't see anyone else here, either, and I've waited 3 days now. So if you don't mind, I'll claim my "prize." lol XD
This is a very nicely constructed, articulate, and almost sad but not quite sad, of a "letting go." But it is filled with bittersweet emotions and memories that we can see and feel. And also, you help the reader by beginning well, progressing smoothly and ending with just enough of a question to give us something to think about after we're done reading. That's hard to do and you've done it well. On the technical the only thing I could find was a sentence where inserting a "you" might have been good. In my supreme wisdom *cough, cough* I didn't write down the sentence I'm talking about. You'll see it. And it's a little thing, anyway. The more important is that you let us know how difficult separations can be, and that they aren't usually governed intelligently. That is, they are usually governed emotionally, even if the separation itself is performed physically. It is hoped that your characters all come to good terms with themselves and each other and accept the inevitable, treasuring what had been given but which couldn't continue.
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