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12-28-2008
June Nazarian
BJ - Great shape poem, they are fun to do. This one certainly evokes the emotion of dagger in heart. I can clearly see the dagger with the words you have used and the picture at the top completes the sentiment. Very well done, and thanks for visiting my "tree" poem......June
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11-18-2008
Nancy Pawley
Not only does your poem get to the heart of the matter, it shapes itself to pierce the tender soul who comes to realize that pain is part and parel of life and living. Wonderful work.
Nancy
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08-03-2007
Richard Reed Jr
Great work on this contest poem.
I always did like your intuitive abilities and your creativity and imagination.
Keep up the good work. Good Luck.
Hope to hear from you soon,
Rich
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07-29-2007
BJ Niktabe
Thanks Frank, and I realized my mistake too late. I wanted to post a graphic of a heart with a dagger through it to accompany this poem. It made more sense that way, but I forgot that you can't add the picture while the piece is in an open contest, and I had already entered it. Oops!
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07-28-2007
Frank Fields
Considering that it's an experimental piece almost removes it from the ability to be be critiqued. Almost. What I will offer is that the form, shape, physical appearance of the piece doesn't reinforce the poem, itself. I thought the presentation of the poem in such a short space, covering the emotional attitudes with supporting lines, was very well done. ^^
I've mentioned elsewhere, that I generally support experimental efforts. I do think, however, that the form should reinforce the poem.
Your work is always good, BJ. ^_^
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07-27-2007
BJ Niktabe
This was written for Samantha H's contest, "Experimental Pieces."
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