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School Daze....
by
Frank Fields
copyright 09-16-2007
Age Rating: 4 to 127
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Summer's out, School is in.
New, stiff jeans and sneakers.
Clean, snow-white T-shirts, sun dried,
smelling good.
Pretty girls, long waving hair, quiet,
smell good, too.
A noisy hush, the rush, finding
this room or that.
Paper tablet smells and #2 pencils
sharpened fresh.
Monster motorcycles rumble, smell of
Gunk and grease and leathers.
Here's the library--dusty, musty, old smells
and quiet rustles of a turning page.
The gym with it's waxed floor--no street shoes
here, coach will growl.
Teachers waiting same as kids,
by the desk or at the door.
End of summer breeze comes gently down
the halls, teasing papers and their hair.
Metal locker smells, strange caverns
never empty, always safe.
Assemblies, and the study halls.
Cheer leaders, and the grassy fields
with sandy tracks.
Summer's out, School is in....
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04-21-2008 Jordan Screws
How could I have missed this? Not middle school, the poem, that is. High school was somewhat better, but it does not compare to college. Much more freedom of action in college, and it feels like your education means something since you determine its direction. Anyway, this is not a bad poem.
As far as I can can remember middle school, the images you project are pretty accurate. Everyone clusters near the doorway to the classroom, awaiting the teacher to unlock the door so class can officially begin. My middle school library DID have musty books, but the institution had been in use since the 1950s (and I went from 1997-1999), so it was to be expected. While all of your imagery is accurate and pertains to my experience, the most accurate would be your reference to a summer breeze. It both clears the building of students and staff while foretelling new beginnings the next year.
While I did not care to remember middle school, I remembered it anyway, such is the power of your work. If there is any real fault to this, I feel that it could have been a bit longer. A modest suggestion would be to describe a class in session, if only to add a bit more to the scenario you have presented. However, that is a trifle compared to the rest of your work... which was great, as usual. Keep up the good work!
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10-08-2007 Leigh G.
Haha...nice descriptions and choice of words. I haven't set foot in a school since...hmm. Lemme calculate...7 years...so since 2000 or 1999. Gotta love home school, though it's rather lonely. Sometimes I think going to a conventional school would be nice, then I think of how miserable I'd be and change my mind. All that homework...all that math...*cringe* All that math without proper explanation...*cringe*
Zanyway, good work on this piece! Nice detail with describing all the situations.
Leigh of the Commenting Community
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09-30-2007 Samantha P.
The detail was so descriptive, it sounds just like school to me, except this was way better than i could write. Plus i have to deal with school all the time, and i definiatly dont want to writr about it in my free time.
great poem
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09-27-2007 Walter Jones
Background plays in mind triggers, singing in voice of memory, filter thoughts and begging for joy left cold on a place I wish I could return to, but only for the moment in mind, thanks for sharing a real moment.. Walt
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09-26-2007 Richard Reed Jr
All senses were certainly engaged in the writing of this piece as are anyone's who reads this.
I can see the ivy clinging to the walls of my high school alma mater in Harrisburg, Pa.
The words and phrases are well-chosen and well-arranged.
The structure is such so that the verses lightly roll off one's lips.
This one filled me with joy.
Thanks,
~Rich
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09-17-2007 Emily Garwood
Reminds me of when i started junior school ( dunno what you call it in america but in england you're in junior school till 12 then snior school) ANYWAYS the pencils nice new white t shirts first asemblies and line up to go to our classrooms and getting lost...don't understand why people don't like school fascinates me and always will very good write loved it keep up the good work!!!!
Emy
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09-16-2007 Frank Fields
Perhaps I should have added a prefatory remark to this work. I don't usually do that. But, yes, this piece was designed more to appeal to those whose high school experiences were comparable to my own. Very special days, those. But, truly, I think each generation's high school experiences are special. In different ways, perhaps, but still just as special and memorable.
Frank :)
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09-16-2007 Everett (dale) Pogue
Frank: The younger readers probably don't feel this as much but it took me back to those great times of years past. You captured it all, except for the announcements and pledge over the intercom. I ALMOST wish I were there...but not quite. Thanks for the nostalgic trip down memory lane. O yes, don't even drop your pencil in the library. Dale
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