If You’re Gone, Then I am too
by
Leah G.
(Age: 16)
copyright 09-20-2007 Contest Winner
Age Rating: 10 to 127
You were always there for me,
But now I can’t find you.
When did you decide to disappear?
This isn’t normally what you do.
You told me you loved me many times,
You said you’d never let me go,
But now you’re gone without warning-
And I really miss you so.
Did I cause you to run away-
Or was it something bigger than me?
I need to know- because I love you so,
And this isn’t how things should be.
Maybe I could have loved you better,
Maybe I could have wanted you more,
There’s still no reason to leave no trace,
And take back promises from before.
I’m looking... searching for your face-
Longing to hear your voice.
And then I suddenly realize that
Your actions were made by choice.
So now you’re gone and I’m still waiting,
Desperately searching for a clue.
But now I know- that you chose to go.
So if you’re gone, then I am too.
It’s time to move on, sudden enough,
But let’s hope it’s for the best.
I miss you so, since you chose to go;
But I still love you, I confess.
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this poem is really touching. it's really sad too almost made me cry. the first line is perfect and the ending is really sweet, i really like your choice of words and the rhymes are perfect.
Leah, this poem was amazing. You did a really nice job on it. It sort of remind me of one of my poems, you remind me. It has a similiar meaning. Only from a female point of view.
Haha...this reminds me so much of so many of my poems. My most recent endeavor is "Could There Ever Be A Day?" and I'm reworking the original to make it rhyme. It's more of a song, here's a little piece of it:
Could there ever be a day,
You're not just one step away?
Could there ever be a time,
My feelings aren't trapped in rhyme?
You've always been there
But when I reach out to embrace you, I only feel air
And I brainstormed making more than the chorus rhyme when making a costume. XD Anyway. Good work on this one! The trials and tribulations of love plague us all. Best thing to do is try holding on to the good memories, and when you think of that person do your best to remember that. While remembering happy times can only deepen depression in it's early stages, with time it helps. Just a pity time can't pass a little faster when we rely on it for healing purposes, ya?
Wowwww.... gee, Leah, you really should be more choosy about who you pick up a relationship with. XD Just kidding. This was phenomenal! The rhymes were so infuriatingly perfect.... The whole poem sorta melts off your mouth when you read it. And the phrases were very beautifu!! You'd better be as proud as you can for your writing ability, because you never know when I'll invent a way to successfully steal and get away with it.
I should have read this one first, before I read the last one. They seem to be tied, somehow. Although this one has more of a finality to it--probably because of the pain of separation--where your other one had a little bit of hope at the end. No matter. I like this one better. It's stronger, has more texture and more vivid emotional portrayals. Not a lot of imagery or similes and metaphors, which many romantic poets love to use *points at self* but it still carries very well and smoothly, from opening to end.
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