Time gone, all too blurry-
Memories departed in a hurry.
Years that have passed before,
Semesters filled with knowledge and lore.
Months with activities and friends,
Weeks that will come again.
Days that have lasted forever-
Hours that were spent together.
Minutes that will barely last,
Seconds that are soon to pass-
And then looking back for a moment…
Seconds too short to relive again,
Minutes crammed with fun and pretend.
Hours spent on homework and fun-
Days that can not be redone.
Weeks of things put to waste,
Months of schoolwork in haste.
Semesters perfected,
Years collected,
Memories that have come and gone-
Time left to ponder on.
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Author's note: If you looks closely, you can see the format of this poem. The first stanza's lines start with a "unit" of time, starting big and working smaller. (time, memories, years, semesters, months, weeks, days, hours, minutes, seconds) then the middle line uses the word "moment" as the smallest unit. then the last stanza uses the same words from the first stanza from smallest to biggest (seconds, minutes, hours, days, weeks, months, semesters, years, memories, time) yeah this explanation is really bad, sorry if it confused you even more... sort of random- i was bored when i wrote this.
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If I weren't brain dead right now I'd tell you the Japanese word for time. But I am...ah well. XD
*blinks* Nice format...I never would of thought of that. XD Anyway, great work on this! I can see why Meh likes it. The ideas remind me of a whole bunch of stories, but not in the been-there-already-done sense. Which is a very nice thing. Great work here! I love your choice of words and overall flow. Upon rereading it, I saw the format and that just made it all the better. Keep it comin'!
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Wow, definitely my favorite poem so far, including all those you've ever showed me. I really like the implications of time that seems to speed by, for good or for bad. It all depends on how much you enjoyed it, huh? Truth is, time is relative. Your idea of infinity is only 14 years, Leah, while mine is 13. It's because that's only how long you've lived. But for a 60-year old, it wouldn't feel that way. Time would pass with a sixth of the speed it does for a 60-year old than it would for a 10-year old. It all just depends. ^-^ Einstein's theory of special relativity. Gotta love the theology in here; it's very true.
Your rhymes and your patterns are wonderful! It's very fluid, and it's just so well written I wish I could delete it from your memory and steal it for myself. XD
Fantastic poem! My favorite poem you've written so far!
This is very eye catching! I did notice the structure of the poem and felt that it was very effective. It reminded me of the ebb and flow of the tides. I don't know if anyone else will catch it (because of my abstract way of thinking) but I think that the poem itself almost looks like a watch. Even if you were just bored when you wrote this, the structure came out flawlessly. :)
I like how you mentioned schoolwork and fun. It makes me keep in mind that I'll be graduating high school this year. Ah, what a nostalgic day that'll be. :p
Thanks for writing!
Keep up the good work.
The work stands very well as a coherent piece of writing, even without the author's note at the end. but that, too, is valuable--it almost makes the reader go back to see if, in fact, the note is validated. Interesting. Yes, the imagery and motion as well as the sights and sounds were all very well handled. Nicely put together, nicely presented, and very coherent. Can't give you too many more gold stars than those. ^^
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