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07-07-2008
Brooke Marquette
Now I feel sleepy...:) Beautiful and imaginary...I could imagine falling asleep in a beautiful land full of faries and unicorns...only a dream is this perfect....but you captured it like reality...love it! the pictures you painted were vivid once again!
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02-22-2008
Leigh Gilholm Fisher
Long time to see, eh?
I was playing Valkyrie Profile and the one mage said magicks...it's strange, I haven't been seeing that spelling variation as much anymore!
Anyway, I was happy to find another fanciful poem. It's seldom I come across poems of the genre, so it's always fun for me with how many poems I've read. XD The descriptions made everything very thing easy to picture and the rhymes kept things following until the end of the poem. Good work!
Leigh of the Commenting Community
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01-21-2008
Nancy Pawley
This poem is lyrical in its beauty, bringing lands and legends of long ago into the heart and soul of a romantic dreamland. Ahhhh, now I lay me down to sleep. Fantastic write.
Nancy
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11-06-2007
Walter Jones
Eastern sound and voice crying out to a world not ready to accept, easily lost in the sounds dancing in my ears, images unfold in color granted a place to rest upon the page.. Walt
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11-01-2007
Tiffany Forster
"Slumber softly, know thy peace
New day comes with Pipes of Pan "
This was an absolute joy to read, its flows so well and paints such a wonderful picture for the reader. I absolutly love how if rhymes, it is so hard to do that (especially they way you do it, with every other line rhyming through the whole poem).
It is one of those poems that I can see accompanying one of those old masterpieces of the Renaissance, it has that timeless feel to it.
*Sigh*
So pretty. Haha, beautiful work.
*hands him a gold cape with a diamond clasp*
*tips her hat*
Tiffany<3
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10-22-2007
Richard Reed Jr
Slumber softly, know thy peace a new day is coming.
The cry from time immemorial to the now-time
Every sage has said the new day is coming
and when we believe it with all the faith we can muster, the new day is already here.
I liked your repetition of:
Slumber softly, know thy peace
It mellows the whole piece(not peace)
with tranquility. I also like the fairy tale ambiance. Deep inside this poetic-serious scribe,
lives a little boy running the whole show, outside my control.
Thank You for this. It is a poem that should be read every night before bed-time,
~Rich
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10-21-2007
Roger Crique
This is a wonderful and poetic (rhythmic) piece. It flows perfectly until the las two stanzas, which I found just slightly forced. I am curious as to why you used Magick as opposed to magic, since there is no other indication of these changes throughout the poem. The imagery is beautifully depicted and the Good vs Evil theme is nicely done.
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