|
 |
 |
 |
 |
 |
Just cause I'm....
by
Alma H.
(Age: 15)
copyright 10-28-2007
Age Rating: 10 to 127
|
 |
| |
I'm short, new, and never seen.
You never know what I mean.
I try and try to do my job,
but you act like a snob.
As my senses become more keen,
I seem to get past the algae.
I'm pulled like a doorknob,
and broken by your mob.
I'm drowning in this aquamarine,
hurtful spirit of benzene.
I'm always free to blob,
with your crude club.
I'm not strongly antisubmarine,
But I know how to turn.
I'm not easy to lob,
But I am easy to rob.
I'm short, new, and never seen.
You always try to be mean.
I actually do my job,
while you just try to stab.
|
Help Us Stop Plagiarism -
Nearly all works at PnP are original. However a few people choose to plagiarize.
To check, choose a phrase from the work, then either drag and drop to the search box or copy and paste.
click on search and works at Google will be shown which match. Just to be sure, please do this before
you recommend or rate the work highly...
|
 |
|
|
|
Select a Random Work
from Poetry
|
|
|
Comments on this Article/Poem:
Click on the commenter's name to see their Author's Page
11-22-2007 Reginald Fredericks
I enjoyed this. Great work, showed a bit of your personality in this and you did well with the rhyming scheme and I loved the imagery you portrayed in this. Thanks for sharing it with us. Excellent work!!!
|
11-10-2007 Leigh G.
Not bad. There isn't much originality here, since it's the usual daily-issues-of-a-teenage-in-school style, but you managed to keep it interesting. Your rhyming was good and capitalization near perfect. I cannot stand new-age lack of capitalization...
As far as your ideas go, they're good. They feel familiar to some of your other pieces, but not like some authors...*stares at a certain author who dropped PnP, though he was one of the earlier members, and his poetry sucks*
XD What? I didn't name anybody!
All in all, good work.
Leigh of the Commenting Community
|
11-09-2007 Richard Reed Jr
To me this piece is a poem full of enchanting mystery, although maybe you didn't intend it that way. I liked the words, rhymes and phrases that you used. I like short lines.
I thought this to be a very good poem technically and very entertaining.
Excellent work,
~hands her a box of Oreo cookies~
~Rich
|
10-29-2007 Leah G.
I liked this work- how mature you were talking to this snobby person, instead of being all angry and just pointing out all of their faults. You had good rhyming here and you used some descriptive words. Some of the lines/rhymes i didn't understand, probably because this is a personal poem that only you'd understand because i don't know the person your talking about Some of the rhymes seems forced because the syllable difference in the lines, where one line has way more syllables than the next. But besides that, great job!
|
|
Visitor
Reads: 152
Total Reads: 174
Comments: 4
Author's Page
Email the Author
Add a Comment
Favorite of:
|
|
Welcome !
