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Always In The Middle
by
Samantha P.
(Age: 15)
copyright 11-05-2007
Age Rating: 4 to 127
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Gentle, warm fingertips brush against the chilling glass,
Always longing to touch the moon.
Warmth and cold are drawn to one another,
Which is why I do not pull my hand away.
Eventually, we will meet up, and the glass will become warm.
Since day and night cannot live without the other
Sunset, and sunrise are the only times they meet,
But love has bound them equal for eternity.
On the darkest of nights the stars twinkle the brightest,
And on the brightest of days, there is always a cloud or a tree.
May the stars never forget to twinkle, and may the trees always live,
Because whenever I am gone, I want to remember that wonderful chill,
On my fingertips
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12-19-2007 Rikki V.
Well done, My dear Moon Saphire! I love how you are able to say things like this , that few people even think about, in such a beautiful way! I wish i could write poetry like you! btw...how's the book going? You've probably worked on it as much as i have mine recently. (*cough cough none coughcough*)
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12-06-2007 Lauren T.
Nicely done!
I like it a lot.
Your style was refreshing from my own.
Very clear images and a deep underlieing message, you can't have one thing with out the opposite part.
Like light and dark.
Thanks for the comment on my works!
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11-09-2007 Richard Reed Jr
This was a beautiful poem. It gave me lots of warm feelings as I was reading it. It's somewhat deep with its indirect allusions to the ying/yang of Taoism, at least I saw them there.
There were some very vivid images, clear as HDTV -LOL.
Did I tell you I liked it?
I loved it,
~hands her a golden bracelet with inlaid sapphires~
~Rich
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11-07-2007 Everett (dale) Pogue
Samantha: This is a fascinating poem. You had some fresh pictures that I loved. It had movement and feeling. I really like this write. I will read it some more. You are good! Dale
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11-05-2007 Leigh G.
Maybe it's the insane amount of Geico commercials I'm hearing while commenting that have twisted all sorts of childhood pleasures that have gotten my mind in a disturbed jumble of childish inane thoughts: *deep breath* but for some stupid reason I though "monkey in the middle" when I saw the title of your piece. XD And we'll just call this the run on sentence and paragraph of the month. Let it be done...
Ima, the poem! It's a very nice piece that tells a beautiful story that's easy to picture, and for once I won't pick about originality but it's because I have another pick...your choice of spacing. Since you're completing sentences on each line, your choice in spacing isn't that distracting to me but I'm partial to old fashioned paragraphs with spaces between them. But anyway!
Overall, your descriptions and narrative voice in this piece kept it going.
Leigh of the Commenting Community
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