The Old Man
by
Jim Duprie
(Age: 61)
copyright 11-28-2007 Contest Winner
Age Rating: 13 to 127
The Old Man
by J. Duprie
The Old Man silently stared out the window one day,
He saw Buffalo roaming the plains.
The eagles were soaring high above,
And there were coyote pups at work and play.
In an instant they were gone, as he looked out again,
and he saw Longhorns driven by riders with rope in hand.
He looked once more to make sure it was real,
And saw post and fences made of wire and steel.
He rubbed his eyes as he looked again.
He saw billboards, buildings, and cars so sleek.
The Old Man silently stared out the window that day.
And he felt a tear run down his cheek.
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The tale old, the picture the same the words burn still, a heart broken by time, a world that takes more than it gives, progress, destruction, no words and images ripping pieces from our heart.. Walt
I'd probably be called a "punk ass kid" but I still enjoyed this piece. I grew up around older people, so hearing them rant about new technology and how it doesn't change anything and only makes things worse is familiar to me. Your piece was short, but I do like how you focused on the advances of civilization. And since the peaceful natural area is destroyed by cities, it also hints to the negative effects of modern technology, such as pollution. Ironic though, I'm supposed to be writing a report of pollution for school...XD All in all, good work on this piece!
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I really like the imagery in this one. I can imagine vivid paintings on my wall of the glorious days of the west.
I also appreciate the sentiments, I love my good old days best of all, although I know even in the good old days, people were still thinking of the good old days, and someday bean bag seats will be antiques, LOL.
Technically it's a sound piece with good rhyme and rhythm.
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