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06-25-2011
Amanda Zurenda
Such pain and desperation, painted in words that recreate the emotions for those who have been here before. Your words make it so easy to empathize with this dilemma. The thought of, if I could only sacrifice myself, things would be okay again. But we don't realize that it really won't be, because what's done is done. Excellent write!
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04-30-2010
Emily Valle
The grief was expressed very well. You held nothing back, the emotion poured out in each word.
I also appreciated the acceptance of being treated harshly, asking for it, saying you deserve it. It added to the drama of the piece, how we sometimes punish ourselves for our mistakes more then the people we've wronged.
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09-25-2009
Cynthia Baello
I like the way you started this poem with the premise, and then closing it well with "forgive".
The struggle and pain so well stated and the process of leaving and the prospect of the result also eloquently taken up. Few could get this message across so strongly. Sad but beautiful.
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05-09-2009
June Nazarian
Lauren, this is a well-written poem that certainly rings true, at least for me. Hurting someone else can cause in oneself the deepest sort of pain. Your poem has expressed this with emotion and clarity. Very nice....June
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