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03-17-2010
Emily Valle
Wow.
This meant a lot to me personally.
You expressed emotion and the way things feel perfectly. I loved "Always and forever I will live with this scar,
deep down to where no one can see."
It's true. Not many people see the battle wounds and bruises that are within.
But this poem helped show them.
Good work!
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11-03-2009
Eric Siedzikowski
This is truly a charmingly written piece of literary art that had me emotionally affected at verse number one.You have a special gift of writing whereby you can successfully convey your emotions in a civil manner that works,looks and sounds great in writing.You are a talented and gifted writer that will cause me to continue reading your marvelous work.Sincerely,Eric
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11-22-2008
BJ Niktabe
Too many of us have felt the pain of betrayal that you've written about. Reading this piece brought back memories of the pain felt so long ago, pain I thought was forgotten.
It never goes away, even if it never rises again to your thoughts. It helps make us who we are today.
I do agree with Rich when he said, "...My one suggestion would be to cut the large lines into smaller lines.That would make for
better rhythm, reading, and breathing..."
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06-01-2008
Anthony Lane Stahlhut
If it doesn't kill you it makes you stronger. Life does not go how we plan at times and what others do to our trust is sad, but you cannot change yourself, if you like who you are.We love, we get hurt and we love again, but to not trust someone because someone else lied is not going to help us. Be careful, but don't change who you are. Nice write for bringing out conversations. Anthony
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05-25-2008
Wayne Thomas
As it stands, this is a piece well done. I'm a stickler, however, for imagery, and getting as many of our senses as possible into a poem. You might think of how to use some of that if you decide to do a rewrite. I think that would help the poem hit home a little harder. Look forward to more.
Wayne
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