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 05-10-2008 June Nazarian
What a fun poem! I'm 90% kid so it hit the spot for me, and little ones would love it too. The fun-sounding, nonsense words are wonderful. Reminds me of one of my favorite nursery rhymes which begins: Intery, mintery, cuttery corn - and goes on from there. Also, unlike the last little piggy, your last one stayed home. Very enjoyable........June
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05-09-2008 Wayne Thomas
Reminds me a little of Dr. Seuss. An excellent poem to make into a childen's picture book. Perfect structure and perfectly nonsensical. Ingenious. Good.
Wayne
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05-08-2008 Everett (dale) Pogue
For children? Most assuredly! But also for we old coots who need to seekity peekity into the flora and fauna. I liked the way the adventure grew with the hours. This is a bright, enjoyable traipse through the meadows of our lives. Dale
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05-07-2008 Mike Gallimore
I missed this when it first appeared, but I'm glad I caught it now -- it's excellent. I started my PnP career with a poem for children, and have been meaning to do another one. This poem sets the bar pretty high. Great job!
BTW, I used the one, two, three... device in a very different kind of poem; and I wanted to point it out to other writers. It's a really good way to organize a piece before you even begin. You've got an outline, and all you have to do is complete each stanza. best of all, you automatically know when you're done!
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05-04-2008 Frank Fields
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This one started out to be a very serious abstraction on life and death, or something like that.
Then, as it happened, I had been reading some of Omar Khayyam and Lewis Carroll. They both got kind of jumbled up and the child inside took over.
As well as the teacher, I suppose. ^^
It is intended for children. Of all ages. I'm pleased it was a fun piece. Mission accomplished! LOL
Thanks for stopping by and visiting. And praising, too!! o.o;;
Frank :)
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05-03-2008 Lacey Ruppel
I forgot to mention I love the title and the picture choice (so cute!)
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05-03-2008 Lacey Ruppel
This poem is so much fun. You probably had a lot of fun with this one, playing with words and such. I also like the use of numerical order; makes this poem feel like a nursery rhyme. Also reminds me of "The Jabberwocky" by Lewis Carroll all the nonsensical words. Your word choice worked really well for this poem!
Great Write!
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