Age Rating: 13 +
Picture Credits: http://www.goodart.org
Sweetly soft, flowered,
Feather, angel's kisses
Soft upon my hungry lips,
Quiet soft and ever gentle
Lest she disappear.
This phantom faerie
My true love,
Lay me on a cloud of passion
Your eager lips on mine.
Eager both, but yours the more
To raise my heart and soul
To Ecstasy with touch
And angel breath of love.
Curling locks as soft as silk
Brush 'cross my cheeks
As your lips come unto mine.
Cup my chin in tiny hand,
Caress my warming cheeks
My brow, with tiny angel lips.
Like heaven sent with Venus
Rendered mine and Aphrodite
Witness of a gently flaming
Passion born by angel lips sublime.
Shameless in their want,
Explore moist honey goodness
That you seek to share as mine.
Kiss away the worldly fears
The tears of sorrow sadly spent.
The hunger in my heart
Awaits your love's return
To make me whole again
With quiet angel's kisses.
Caress again my lips with yours
And let me see the pools
Of magick in your eyes.
Let me hold you once again
I would know you're here,
With me, soft the
Whispers sweet as cinnamon.
Your love's honey dew gathered by
The forest's Elfin Folk and
Given unto you that we may share
Your angel's kisses.
The illustration is Liefdesdroom by Willem Marten.
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Richard Reed Jr
Well-done my maestro artist. Your sugary pen is magick. When I read this a second time I will bring a jug of wine and Juney. Your piece is filled with good imagery, leaving one with soft warm feelings inside.
I feel, I have offended you when, that was not my intention. I love this poem and naturally, would never suggest you remove it.
Had I seen this before I made my other comments today on your work or anyone else's, I would have remained, silent.
You are one of my favorite poets at this site and I expect, will remain so.
Please except my sincere apology.
Yes, well I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem. But, I really don't think I need to worry about being cuffed and stuffed. However, if I'm interpreting correctly, what you are saying is that because your 18-year old daughter had her eyes widened at the sight of the illustration, then the entire work would have to be deleted. Unfortunately, perhaps, 18+ begins the adult category. While I certainly don't want to offend anyone, not even naive 18 year-old adults who, for some reason or other, had to be described in terms of being coiffed with "big coned shaped hair," neither do I want to deprive the very sophisticated and cultured younger readers from appreciating either or both: my poetry or any illustration that I think tastefully support my works. I'm also not clear on what your critique might be. One comment towards the poem, itself. And one very general comment towards an illustration. Perhaps if you could be more specific than just "too...el natural for an eighth grader"? As a suggestion, your comment is noted. As providing enough critical, objective rationale for removing the illustration, it seems to be somewhat inadequate. I don't appreciate censorship in any form. Not even "tongue-in-cheek" seemingly friendly suggestions that I raise an age rating to an impossibly higher level, because of the not even voiced objection of an adult. If, in fact, there was any objection. Eyes open wide for any number of reasons. Pleasure, happiness, joy, surprise, etc. Certainly it isn't a clear enough objection to me, that has a good enough foundation, to make me either want to remove the image or replace it.
The poem was approved prior to it being opened for reading. Without objection!
The illustration by a very fine artist was also approved and is part of the collection in the General Gallery.
Both the poem and the illustration, as a unit, were approved and opened for the age range specified. Without objection!
My suggestion to you would be that you accompany your daughter to art museums and galleries in your area which exhibit beautiful paintings. Short of that, There are any number of excellent websites that offer thousands of images for the interested viewer.
It is regrettable if either you or your daughter was offended.
The illustration stays as being age-appropriate for the poem, which is also rated age-appropriately!
I'd paint you a picture or take your Angel shopping, if you lived closer. (joke)
Before the directors cuff and stuff you...you better up the age rating, on the illustration.
Yes, it's a lovely picture, but my 18 year old, her eyes widened when she saw it...and if it made her eyes big...the girl with big coned shape hair, yeah her...it might be too... el natural for an eighth grader. Maybe? Just a suggestion.
As always, I enjoyed the poem.