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02-04-2013
Rachel Brown
Frank this Haiku is excellent,
with excellent form and it instantaneously
paints me a wildly vivid picture.
Keep up the great Work.
-Rachel ^_^
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08-26-2008
Frank Fields
Raja,
Thank you. ^^
In retrospect, the title established the focal point for this very slightly altered Haiku. Slightly, only because it does have some human emotional content that a sensei may have questioned. To have continued, once the theme was established, would have been redundant and even boring.
I was greatly influenced by Shakespeare, by the way. And a good many others, as well. Along with some of the fine writers that are right here at PnP. ^_^
Frank :)
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08-26-2008
Raja Sharma
The most aesthetic point in your poem is the way you have conveyed the emotion, without alluding to death directly, or using other metaphors which simply indicate the end of a cycle. This reminds me of some of the poems from William Shakespeare's plays in which he used the images to convey the meaning.They were very different from his love sonnets.
Now when I read this piece , the very first thing which struck me was the title but when I entered the lines I could only praise your mental ingenuity.
Wonderful!
Bless you
Rajasir
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08-21-2008
Walter Jones
It is the memory, a taste of words mixed, time and a glass filled, accepting fate, watching closely, savoring the last drop...Walt
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08-20-2008
June Nazarian
Ah, another haiku. one of my favorite forms because much is conveyed though words are few.
I see here a love, though gone, present in mind as the winter chill is warm. The loss of a loved one is "death" whether or not in actuality. Very nice..........June
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