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You captured the severity of this dangerous and fatal addiction very well. It's a horrible plight of humanity to be so poisoned and enslaved by such terrible addictions.
Nevertheless, this is a very true and well written poem.
I was smoke free for ten years. One day a friend left a cigarette in the car, and since i was so stressed i smoked it. A days later I bought a pack. I have been smoking for a few months now, sneaking it. I was just about to light one up, and read some good poetry.
Not coincidentally, i just finished watching www.Sidroth.org. who has miraculous stories on, and I was crying and praying.
Then i come in to see who won the latest contest, and your poem popped up?
I do have the patches. This is the last pack with a few cigarettes left, when they're gone, I will listen to all the great preachers out there and pray. I am a child of God. Would I want my children or grandchildren to smoke? No!
I'm very glad you enjoyed it. It is beautifully DISGUSTING! I could never find someone attractive that smoked and didn't respect their own life or the lives of others enough to refrain and cease. You know? It's rude, selfish, and ungrateful for this precious gift of life that God gave us! Anyway, thanks again for reading. :-)
Smoking has been made beautifully disgusting by your poem. You created such a vivid image in my head. A look on the inside, seeing the temptations of the selfish sin of indulgence. I loved it.
Great work. <3
A very well written poem on the joys and sorrow of smoking.
'Sorrow' well would you know that if you are already dead.
Nice tempting touches woven and laced with death for the smoker.
Don't bother to read the warning
Note the illusion of Glamour instead
(See? It has an ILLUSION of GLAMOUR. But it's not really, it's a facade. IN all the old movies, smoking was cool or glamorous, but it's deadly! Just like a temptress to a married man... bad news... when you should STAY AWAY... somehow, you're enticed to come in for a closer look and there's the trap, just waiting to be sprung! Addiction... the chains that smoking binds thee with!!!)
Smokey satin fingers your nostrils
And clouds the judgment in your head
(Notice how smoking tells the smoker what to do? And how it's said in a soothing sexy voice? Notice how it commands us to walk the plank, enourages and entices to knock on death's door...)
Yes, darling, inhale my poison deeply
Let my smoke cancer your lungs
Absorb the tarry substance
Taste death upon your tongue
It's all a trap... a deadly trap!
Thank you for reading, rating, but most of all for commenting! I really do appreciate it!
Wow!! Can i just say you make smoking seem and im not saying this in a good way but sexy... the way you play up each word beautifully but its kinda seductive and makes you stop smoking but makes you wanna know this deadly thing and why its so alluring! Congrats on winning
What a way to get the point across...this is great.Maybe that the Surgeon General should use this to get the message across to smokers.I know I got more out of this piece than the warnings on cigarette packages.
Thanks for sharing
Yes! This really captures the evil of smoking. Having been addicted for so many years, I know how hard it is to stop. I know how much strength it takes, how much will power, and I know just how badly you have to want to be free from it. I smoked for almost 30 years, but have been smoke-free for 9.
Reading this, I could almost taste the smoke in my mouth.... YUCK!!!
This should be in a magazine! What a powerful testimony re the evils of smoking! I understand there's something of a metaphor here, and while I don't fully grasp it, I'll acknowledge it and let you womenfolk argue out the nuances of that. Splendid job, sis, one of your best. Don't give up the hope!
Your brother,
Wayne
Well, at the risk of being gruesome, this one hit home with me as I am the widow of a lung cancer victim. Everyone thinks it will happen to someone else until it happens to them... and it is not a pretty end. Perhaps your poem is a metaphor for a poisonous relationship, I don't know, but I love it as a very well-written, not preachy warning of the results of smoking. Very nice!...June
LOL! I'm very glad I read your message about it being a warning to a potential suitor xD Toooootally not what I thought xD You actually made me feel bad, because whenever I get SUPER stressed, I reach for my hidden pack. Though one pack lasts me a year, so I'm rather lucky in not picking up the habit again xD
But I like the idea of this being a metaphor (did I get that word right?) for a woman. It does make sense (having, you know, had experience in that field xDDD!!!!!!!) of what it can feel like when you become so overwhelmed by someone who knows they're bad news.
I thought this was strange for you to write a warning like this, but then I read the note about what it was, and totally makes sense for you! Had to read it again, and I LOVE it both ways LOL!
Funny how the smoker may end up feeling the effects, but the kids in the car all those times, may never smoke, yet they die of cancer. You don't just harm yourself. I smoked and quit 17 years ago. You can quit! You just can't try to quit or it doesn't work. Make the decision and stick to it! Your life and those around you are worth it! Very nice write. I missed you! Anthony
Although this was ORIGINALLY written as a warning of sorts to a would-be suitor, it seems to stand alone as well in warning of the dangers of smoking. Sometimes I add a commentary at the end of my poems, but decided not to at the time I posted this. As you can see, I've reconsidered my initial decision. Mary, Mary, Quite Contrary! Welcome to my ever present state of dichotomy. LOL
This is the kind of reminder that we all need, I think, to remind us of the irreversible damage done to the lungs by smoking, which will, sooner or later, kill the smoker. Especially in today's world, where information and education about the inevitable results from smoking, are so abundant, for anyone to continue is tantamount to saying, "It's my body. if I want to kill it, that's my business!"
Anyone that has a question about this should just ask anyone with COPD, if they don't want to check with their doctor.
Thank you for this!
Frank :)
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