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08-18-2010
Leigh Gilholm Fisher
This poem was very interesting! The storytelling tone in this one was very well presented. I am truly impressed to see how much your writing has improved over the years on PnP. I really hope to read more of your works soon!
~Leigh of the Commenting Community
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12-19-2008
Raja Sharma
As to the emotion and the diction there is everything perfect in your poem. It does sound sweet and sad, however, I would like you to work on meter and rhyme, and that I know will be perfected with practice.
You seem to be loaded with poetic emotion up to the brim and it seems to be oozing out, but, my friend, if a bit of poetic conceit and tact is applied, keeping the overall form and syntax of the poetic creation, the rough gem begins to glitter.
All the best
Good work
God bless you
Rajasir
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11-30-2008
Richard Reed Jr
I can't quite figure out if the guy in this poem is a good guy a bad guy or a good guy who hurt you. It's not clear what that hurt was.
I do like the poem. It is full of open-hearted emotion. A lille criticism if you don't mind ~
Perhaps the poem could have a bit more rhythm.
Good Write,
Rich
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