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Leigh Gilholm Fisher
This was a lovely haiku; they're rather difficult to write, but you conveyed quite a lot with this one. Your choice of words was beautiful, especially the opening line. Keep up the great work!
~Leigh of the Commenting Community
I really enjoy reading Haikus~ probably because I cannot write one to save my life! xD
But this is very visual, and gives my mind room to wander about it, create a picture and then sit and enjoy the stars with them.
xD I dunno, I should probably stop going on about my mind's odd thought pattern.
Let's see if I can add something meaningful to all of this. It's never wrong for anyone to admit that they didn't know something. After all, we all of us, were born totally ignorant of everything. There is no shame in ignorance. ^^
I think structure and format, of any kind, is important until it has been, not necessarily "mastered," but until one is familiar enough with that structure and its application to decide if a variation might be attempted without disturbing the world order.
The articles that others have written, as well as my own, should have made it clear that Haiku will not be bound by purist attitudes. In the creative world there must be allowed tolerances for approaches that don't condemn a work for not following a rigid formula.
Any art form is going to have deviations, variations, and experimental applications. Without those we die. Without those, no new beauty and no new truth is brought into the world to share with others.
I think the final analysis is in the meaning. Does the work, as it is presented, have enough meaning, enough value, that the readers (in our cases) will be hopefully entranced and beguiled by our writings?
Let me share another few points with you on this first presentation. ^_^
Wendi - I am very fond of Haiku for the ease by which it can evoke emotion using so few words. You have written a very nice one, indeed. I can feel the the cool of a beautiful evening, the warmth by a loving presence, the peace found within. I'm not sure what makes "Western" Haiku, but I did count syllables, all's well on that front. Think I'll try a few, they say it's not so easy. .....June