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Bad Deal Girl

by Walter Jones (Age: 69)
copyright 08-11-2009


Age Rating: 13 +


Source bleeds edges of minds
Wisp of sage
Layer in careful rows
Aces of mate
Salvation passed

Water flows in gurgle
Just a jack
Asses of age
In a cup of coffee
Black as night birds

Wander to blue hue
Eyes cannot cry
Death a wish not an option
Marks of hearts kept
Child peeks a dollar down

Man terror demands
Sand turns
Castles fall
One is lean to
All fall

Monster moat
Wrote a juke box
Skip rope rhyme
In moon
Keyless room

Source bleeds edges of minds
Wisp of sage

Aces of mate
Salvation passed

Salvation passed
Aces of mate
Layer in careful rows
Wisp of sage
Source bleeds edges of minds
Keyless room
In moon
Skip rope rhyme
Wrote a juke box
Monster moat
All fall
One is lean to
Castles fall
Sand turns
Man terror demands
Child peeks a dollar down
Marks of hearts kept
Death a wish not an option
Eyes cannot cry
Wander to blue hue
Black as night birds
In a cup of coffee
Asses of age
Just a jack
Water flows in gurgle
Salvation passed






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        08-13-2009     Susan Brown        

I found myself snapping my fingers at your "skip a rope" rhyme line. I'm with them below- you rule the staging page. Yep, the music lives. A packed house applauds your effort.
Susan

        08-12-2009     Alan Reed        

As you have said, Walter, "write to the page and be true to it". You are so unique and wonderful to read. How many metaphors can be packed into one piece that - for me - needed to be read various times. I am intrigued by the "aces of mate and asses of age". It is true love - that ball game is behind us. Wishing for death and not considering it an option --- so Christian in thought as all we are here for is to ready ourselves for death. I hope I got part of it. Not only are you unique in your writes but in your commentary. You are one special poet and sage. -Alan:-0)

        08-12-2009     Raja Sharma        

Black as night birds
In a cup of coffee
Asses of age
Just a jack
Water flows in gurgle
Salvation passed

Excellent!!! The web of thoughts makes one go beyond the known vistas of knowledge. It definitely takes a lot of thought and time to see through the images but when the nectar begins to ooze out it satisfies the mind and soul. Such is the story of life said in different ways by writers and poets but the way you say the things makes them unique because there is not even a slight reflection of any other known poet or writer.
Very unique.
God bless you
Rajasir



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