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by Alan Reed (Age: 67)
copyright 02-28-2011

Age Rating: 10 +

On occasion we do accede
the peak of the highest hill
Achieving our greatest deed
A goal we set out to fulfill

Sitting on top of the world
Passage attained foot by foot
Pondering each stone that we hurled
and every brick that we put

Zealously declaring our conquest
Victory for the world to hear
Witness to our dreadfully best
but all of us shed a slight tear

Mindfulness penetrates passion
and pierces everyone’s heart
for no echo returns compassion
and mute lips tear us apart.


- On the other hand, what they don't know will not hurt them.

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        07-03-2013     Rachel Brown        

I really enjoy this poem
its a really great piece
I really enjoyed this tapestry of a chapter .
the ebb and flow are truly quite flowing in many
many ways .
Also this piece is quite flowing too.
Very nicely put too well done Alan.

        03-07-2011     Raja Sharma        

Dear brother,
Your work reminded me of 'Vanity of the Earthly Greatness' and I have begun to reassess what I have achieved and whether it was according to my set destinations.

I conclude that I am a happy Sisyphus, for no earthly reward and admiration surpasses the satisfaction that I derive from the sense that I am still on the go whereas many have perished and many are on the verge of.

Your philosophical underlying thought encourages me to keep on assessing and reassessing your lines and I am sure I will be able to eke something out of this beautiful poem of yours.

God bless you

        03-05-2011     Mylinda Rives        

You are right, everyone deserves a pat on the back in "Give Us Credit."
Privately this building up of character or whatever is great.
But publicly one must remember that the higher you go the harder you can fall, epecially if you are a "super star".
Americans love to tear them down.
Case in point, Britney Spears, etc.

        03-02-2011     Alan Reed        

It is not so seldom that, even our greatest work can symbolize the vain struggle of man in the pursuit of knowledge. Such was the labor and skill involved in and by which it took to construct the Sisypheum.

Albert Camus, in his 1942 essay, saw Sysiphus as personifying the absurdity of human life. But Camus did conclude that "one must imagine Sisyphus happy", as a struggle itself towards the heights (should) be enough to fill a man's heart.

        03-02-2011     Mae Futter Stein        

Hi Alan,

At least we know we conquered are achievement, even though we get knocked down. I sulk a few days, then get back up and try even harder the next time. People have their own op pinions, and keep closed lip as not to get themselves in trouble. Your rewards are in their respect for you and the light from within the dark tunnel will be shining on you for all to see. It happens to everyone, once in a moment. Good job on the poem.

Always, Mae (hugs)

        03-01-2011     Susan Brown        

Hi Alan,

There is a sad truth in the fact what is important/special to the individual is often times "missed" by the people that matter to them the most. A hidden slap to the face then arrives.

Personally, when this happens to me I tend to turn on my inner ego switch (a.k.a. paint brush) and chop their heads off in livid color...ha!

Your voice echoed in this piece. I believe you hit your targeted audience.

bulls eye,


        03-01-2011     Alan Reed        

... and nobody else knew or cared that we did it. Thank you, Wayne. - Best, Alan

        03-01-2011     Wayne Thomas        

Not quite sure what to make of this one. It is most interestingly done. The theme is classic. As the poets of the 19th century were wont to declaim, we all have our Parnassus to climb, and when we reach the top, it's never quite what we expected.

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