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12-06-2008
Arthur G. Finch
I liked this work a lot, but you seemed under pressure as you write, thus there were many lines where rhymes were forced. You managed the rhyme, but some seem out of line, If you permit me me a suggestion, sit down when you are calm and at ease and reconsider some of those forced lines, Share what you are feeling with out being under the gun, then the right rhyme will develop. Keep writing.
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05-11-2003
Gregory Christiano
Sort of an afternoon that is a lazy, peaceful one.
Good job.
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05-19-2002
William Robbins
Ah the touch of those afternoons. Great verse.
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05-18-2002
Melissa Rives
feelings very well expressed...great imagery as well!
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