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(And haikus do have points... ^_^ i recommend "The Haiku Handbook". Email me, i'll send you the authors. it's a good read.)... ... okay, i'll shut up now. still, very interesting, and you subconciously stuck to form very well ^_^
A haiku is 5 syllables, 7 syllables, 5 syllables.
Clearly flowing stream,
The ripples echo like my heart
Beating in my chest.
^_^ it's true that haiku's are usually one stanza, tho sometimes more. the Japanese are a very concise people in terms of culture. still interesting, though i don't understand it.
I really love this poem. I read it a year ago and then looking at your author's page I remembered and had to come back.
I love how this poem makes your think and wonder and imagine. Though it's odd it strikes a certain angle of inspiration and accomplishment.
I just actually read more of the comments on this peice. I actually have a comment. It is a haiku, and in each stanza it is supposed to have 4 words, 7 words, then 4 words. In fact, i beleive a haiku is supposed to be one stanza, one short and sweet stanza. I have achieved it in this. And in mentioning to Catherine, It is meant to be as though it were one line, unlike most poems. I see what you like in a poem and I am not depriving you of that, or saying it is wrong, but instead Im saying all people write how they write and in what style. This just happens to be my first Haiku, and I meant for it to be short, and cheerful.
Okay.. Well some people have been giving comments asking whats the point? There is no point. A Haiku is meant to be short, and sweet. This one is exactly that too. Just to give you the idea of what a haiku is. This was actually my FIRST poem ever written ;-)
I enjoyed this poem a great deal, I have read through the comments already here but me it created great emmotion and immagery. To me it sounds like such a sad place to be but on Tuesday Rivertown comes alive, which is sad because for the other six days there is nothing going on. Not sure if this is what you wanted but that is my interpretation for what it is worth. The only thing i would change (if it was me) is the title, it gives to much away maybe something just as simple as 'rivertown'. Hope to read more of your work. L
I, myself like writing short poems, but I feel that this poem doesn't create any imagery and doesn't make the reader think or imagine. Also, there is no emotion stirred in the reader. (me at least). Maybe you could try adding a few more adjectives to make the poem live. :) Very promising though!
I have read this a few times, and it gets better
each time.
Thought provking is a good thing, do not change
a word.
It is great to finely find the hidden metaphor.
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